Friday, 30 June 2017

Madie Ziegler show not tell




Maddie Ziegler
I heard the crowd cheering at the top of their lungs
I heard my mum saying my magic Maddie
I saw the The crowd steering like googly eyes staring at you
I felt tired from dancing as hard as the best dancer in the world
I felt so happy when I found out I won
I wondered if I would get through to the finals
I wondered if  my dad would come if I got into the finals
I wondered what dance I would do if I got into the finals

1 comment:

  1. Hi Grace, we have been doing this two you have done a great job. I love that you have used similes but maybe next time you could use some alliteration.

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